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Rising Sun
By TG

the sun rises in slo-mo
from the shades of the clouds
painting
fish belly white
orange yellow
rose red
lemon green
for fear of disturbing the monotonous darkness

in the oak trees
the birds begin to try out their instruments
flute
trumpet
shakuhachi
reed-rope
Mongolian khumei
oboe

dewdrops roll down from the tip of the grass
falling on the lawn softly
a squirrel burrowing out of tree roots
still with a drowsy look
amber school bus drives into the community
in the haze quietly
like an old witch out of fairy tales
takes away the children carrying schoolbags
from underneath the street lamps


旭日
文|忒绿

缓缓升起
在云的影里
涂抹
鱼肚白
橘子黄
玫瑰红
柠檬绿
生怕惊扰了单调的黑色

鸟在橡树上开始试奏各自的乐器
长笛
小号
尺八
芦笙
呼唛
双簧管
露珠从草尖上 滚落
落在草坪上的声音很轻
松鼠 钻出树根的洞穴
依然睡眼惺忪
琥珀色的校车朦胧中开进社区
像从童话里出来的老巫婆 悄悄
收走路灯下肩背书包的孩子





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世界诗歌网每日诗选第1080期 —— 忒绿译/忒绿:旭日
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忒绿诗歌 来自手机 论坛元老 2023-8-6 06:10:40
青未君好,握手:
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The mention of the bus taking away the children with their schoolbags under the walking lamps adds a sense of nostalgia and a glimpse into everyday life.

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光影交织,色音相谐。大赞~
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忒绿诗歌 来自手机 论坛元老 2023-7-19 11:48:34
一位美国诗友的评论 Sarrah walters - Your poem beautifully captures the serene and magical moments of a rising sun. The description of the sun rising in slow motion, emerging from the shades of the clouds, evokes a sense of anticipation and awe. The vivid imagery of the sun's colors - fish belly white, orange yellow, rose red, and lemon green - showcases its gentle and cautious approach, as if afraid to disturb the darkness.  The mention of birds in the oak trees trying out their instruments, from flute to trumpet, shakuhachi to reed-rope, and Mongolian khumei to oboe, adds a melodic and harmonious element to the scene. It paints a picture of nature waking up and creating a symphony of sounds to accompany the rising sun.  The dewdrops rolling down the grass and the drowsy squirrel emerging from the tree roots further emphasize the tranquility and stillness of the early morning. The arrival of the amber school bus into the community, seemingly out of the haze like an old witch from fairy tales, adds an intriguing and whimsical touch. The mention of the bus taking away the children with their schoolbags under the walking lamps adds a sense of nostalgia and a glimpse into everyday life.  Overall, your description captures the beauty, serenity, and subtle wonders of a sunrise, creating a vivid and enchanting scene.  Enjoyable
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